Thursday, September 22, 2011

Campaigner Challenge: Imago, Miasma, Lacuna, Oscitate and Synchronicity. OMG.

Here is this week's Campaigner Challenge, and wasn't it a doozy! There were the rules: 
The Challenge is:
Write a blog post in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, whether flash fiction, non-fiction, humorous blog musings, poem, etc. The blog post should:
  • include the word "imago" in the title
  • include the following 4 random words: "miasma," "lacuna," "oscitate," "synchronicity,"
If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional and included in the word count), make reference to a mirror in your post.
For those who want an even greater challenge (optional), make your post 200 words EXACTLY!


And here is my effort: 




 Mirror Imago

     The explosion brought us running.
     A greenish miasma hung over the workshop floor. The place was quiet, the silence as laden as a protracted lacuna in an orchestral piece.
     “Uncle Tiberius?”  I peered through the fumes. “Uncle Tiberius?”
      “Oh, sir,” squeaked the maid. “Is he dead? I know he’s dead!”
     “If he’s not, Aunt Constance will murder him.” My jaw dropped at the sight of the smashed mirror. The empty gilt frame leaned against the wall. And, dear Lord, the grandfather clock! Cogs and weights and springs littered the floor.
     “Don’t oscitate, m’boy!” a cheery voice exclaimed. “Bally bad manners, wot!”
     He rose up out of the green mist like a phantasm.
     “Tiberius!”
     My uncle was not the same man I’d seen at breakfast. He was young and ruddy-faced.  He was wearing a grin from ear to ear. The only things that remained of his familiar elderly features were his large sagging ears and tufty white hair.
     He studied himself in a shard of the broken mirror, and tugged ruefully at a floppy lobe. “Ah, a success, all in all, apart from a few issues with synchronicity!” He beamed. “Lead on, m’boy, what’s for luncheon?” 

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Check out the rest of the entries here at Rach Writes
If you liked mine you can vote for it. I am number 3 on the list. 

133 comments:

  1. Thanks to a few detours to the dictionary, I not only enjoyed this piece, but understood it.

    And I like how you used both the mirror and clock to symbolize (or synchronize) his time-shifting transformation.

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  2. Thanks, guys! It was fun to write, once I'd figured out what half those damn words meant! Lacuna, really? I'm still reeling from that.

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  3. Oh my god I don't even know what some of those words mean.

    I was a finalist judge for the last challenge but I am going to have to spend some quality time with my dictionary if they ask me to do it again.

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  4. LOL, Sommer! My first port of call was a dictionary! Turns out Lacuna is not a beachfront resort. Who knew?

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  5. Jen I'm impressed! Great job. I don't see how you pulled that off so quickly...and so well. You go girl!

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  6. I didn't even notice the obscure words. Great job!

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  7. I loved this, Jen! Very imaginative, and delightfully written.

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  8. This is fantastic! :) A great deal of fun to read and good inclusion of the required words!

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  9. Wow! Follow that...
    Good piece of flash.

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  10. Very original way to incorporate those words! Fun to read :D

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  11. A very wonderful piece. Nice job. I rather enjoyed reading it.

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  12. Look at you already posting your sub and making the rest of us look like slackers.

    That's pretty good for having to throw that mess of weird words together. Your dialogue is great.

    I have no idea how to tackle this one yet.

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  13. I really loved this piece. It's a great little story. Very well written.
    And I'm so happy you had to go look up a couple of the words too. Makes me feel much better.

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  14. This is simply wonderful, Jen! Tiberius is charming, and the setting is nicely described in only 200 words. ~ Nadja

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  15. I very much enjoyed the interaction between your two characters. Natural and flowed. Loved the accent of the one, too.

    Great job, Jen! :)

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  16. This was absolutely terrific. LOVED it :D

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  17. Man, after reading this, it's back to the drawing board for me! Awesome job! I'm #34~

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  18. I did like this. It had a nice sci-fi feel to it. Off to like your entry.

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  19. Jen, this is an excellent piece. I enjoyed it. It reads like it belongs in a book!

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  20. Very nice, love that the grandfather is so jolly no matter the outcome! ; )

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  21. Forgot to mention that I love your blog pic! Wish I was there! ; )

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  22. Very impressive use of language to make those words sound normal!!!

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  23. Thanks everyone! I definitely went more light-hearted this time around!

    @ LG: My secret is the international date line! I was writing while everyone else was sleeping.

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  24. Excellent piece of flash fiction!I especially like how calm and happy Tiberius is after blowing up part of the house.

    I am so glad I'm not the only one who was flummoxed by those words. I definitely needed the dictionary before writing my challenge piece.

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  25. Very nice, Jen! Good use of the words and creating multiple characters in such a small number of words. Well done!

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  26. This was a lot of fun to read. Loved it!

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  27. The first line was fabulous. It started the action and tension right off. The imagery was beautiful and I love how it turned out. Oh, those crazy uncles!

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  28. This was so much fun to read! Greaty entry!

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  29. Nice! Great story - I want to read more...and have some of uncle's potion. :)

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  30. Good times! Way to instantly and quickly get a bunch of characterization into so few words.

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  31. I loved it! I was totally hearing an English accent in my head while reading Tiberius. You captured his voice well! :D

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  32. So much fun!

    Seriously. I love the dialogue. Your characters sound like the type of people I want to hang out with.

    I'm gonna have to Like this one. Great job!

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  33. I love this story and the way you include the vocabulary without making it feel forced. Great job!

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  34. You did an excellent job of using all the words. Nice story.


    Lee
    Tossing It Out

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  35. Thanks, everyone! I looked at those words, couldn't handle trying anything serious, and figured I'd just see what happened. And if you have a mad scientist uncle, he has to be called Tiberius, wot!

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  36. Very nicely done, Jen. Love the story and the characters.

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  37. Haha, I loved this. And I love the way you worked the words in.

    Favorite line: He rose up out of the green mist like a phantasm.

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  38. lol- wow, this would make a great book premise- you threw me right into the scene! Great job!

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  39. Great imagery! And you brought the character to life in so few words. Well done.

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  40. Where can I get that green stuff! LOL! Great story Jen. Perfect use of the given words. Well done.

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  41. What a cool take on the challenge. I agree with Ann, I need to shave a few years off.

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  42. Haha, nice! Everything flows so well, and the contest words match the voice and atmosphere.

    P.S. Did anyone else think "imago" sounded like a fruit?

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  43. Fun fun fun! I want some...without the explosive parts :D

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  44. Ha ha! Very nice. Tiberius and Constance seem the perfect name choices for this little piece. Love it.

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  45. Thanks, everyone!

    @ GK, imago sounds like a type of mango to me!

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  46. Terrific piece, love the mad scientist vibe.

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  47. Nice job! Well done! Love the images!

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  48. Pure win! Pace, setting, dialog, the writing-it is all awesome. You are totally going to hit semi-finalists for sure with an entry like this.

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  49. “Oh, sir,” squeaked the maid. “Is he dead? I know he’s dead!”
    “If he’s not, Aunt Constance will murder him.” My jaw dropped at the sight of the smashed mirror.

    Now that's voice. You had a ball writing this, didn't you? It was a ball and a bat reading it! :-D

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  50. Thanks again, everyone! This was heaps of fun to write.

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  51. Interesting! I like the idea of a youthening potion!

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  52. This was wonderful! Fun, clever and entertaining. Excellent use of the prompts too. Five stars!

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  53. Man, I enjoyed this piece. You did a wonderful job using the words. Loved it, loved it, by Joe, I loved it.

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  54. What can I say that everyone else hasn't already said??? It flowed so smoothly even with all the big words and Uncle Tiberius is a great character!

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  55. I love this! And you have the honor of being one of the few I've read that's just plain fun, not sad :). Thanks for a fun read!

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  56. I like how you went in a surprisingly different direction than most I've read in the challenge. You've created a wonderful story. Good job!

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  57. Wow, thanks everyone! I think this is the most comments I've ever had on a post! :)

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  58. I'm in love with Uncle Tiberius. What an awesome old (Should I say young?) man.

    Awesome work. =)

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  59. REally well done, Jen! I think I shall vote on this one!

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  60. I love the mad scientist, Jen! Definitely a fun response to the challenge.

    Thank you for visiting my blog and commenting on mine!

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  61. This was a great lot of fun. I love the nephew's reaction of uncle will be dead if he isn't already. Great use of those hard prompt words.

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  62. This was a great lot of fun. I love the nephew's reaction of uncle will be dead if he isn't already. Great use of those hard prompt words.

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  63. A lot of fun! Lovely piece of children's fantasy.. the uncle somehow reminded me of Uncle Albert in Mary Poppins.

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  64. Thanks everyone! I'm glad you all enjoyed it!

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  65. Wonderful story, I really enjoyed it!

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  66. Very fun story! Made me smile. That's the true test.

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  67. and expect a lot more comments to come.

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  68. Excellent use of all the words and such a great story you created in the 200 words. Really impressive. I've only just found out what the words mean!

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  69. Wow I love it! This was a really fun read!
    (I'm entry #113)

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  70. Hi,

    Fun read! Explosive descriptions and nicely worded piece! ;)

    best
    F

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  71. You did a great job of bringing Uncle Tiberus to life so quickly. Makes you want to see more of his crazy ideas.

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  72. Good vivid writing, and a story as well. Well done.

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  73. Hah, you made me laugh! Nice story...

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  74. Ack! Destroying a grandfather clock--a travesty! Good job. I love the name Tiberius. Very fitting in this piece.

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  75. Holy heck! Ninety comments! Thanks so much, everyone! :)

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  76. Excellent! Loved how you captured all those tricky words within this piece.

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  77. This was a great story. I really enjoyed the characters. (hard to do is just 200 words) and I loved the ending!

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  78. Got to love the quirky uncle! Such colourful characters you created in just 200 words :)

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  79. Great voice! I love the name Tiberius. You got my vote :)

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  80. Nice flash fiction Jen:)It's a challenge getting those words into a story.....

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  81. Terrific dialogue! Everything flowed very nicely. Great job!

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  82. Ooh, you caught the musical lacuna too! I didn't know that additional meaning until I looked up the word in the OED.
    Love your entry, especially Tiberius. Off to Like it!

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  83. Oooo Likey, likey, love it!! Nice job. I'm voting :)

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  84. Thanks again, everyone! This is the most comments I've ever had on a post!

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  85. Nice work. I imagine Constance will be next for the procedure.

    mood

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  86. Well done, wot! It didn't feel contrived at all. Thanks for stopping by my post, btw.

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  87. Love! And yeah, "lacuna" was a bit of a mind whirl. This was sooo deftly handled!

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  88. What an interesting and fun post. :)

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  89. I thought I've already left my comment. Or maybe I'm just confused, ha,ha.

    Anyway, this is one of the best entries I've read. Great job! You got my vote :-)

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  90. Oh this is great. There is so much going on and I so definitely want to know more.

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  91. Amazing piece! The most fun I've read in a while. Great action, dialogue, the whole package. Liking you straight away. ;)

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  92. Thanks so much, everyone! Wow, this is my most commented post ever!

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  93. Jen, this one was fun! All I can say is, thank goodness for dictionaries!

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  94. Great idea and so well executed!
    AliB

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  95. Oooh, fun! I'd love to read more of this story!

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  96. @ Candy, LOL, I know!

    Thanks for all the comments, everyone!

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  97. This was great! I was totally sucked into the scene and loved how it turned out. Well done!

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  98. Thanks, everyone! I'm glad you all liked Tiberius. I've got a thing for writing mad uncles and interfering aunts-- I blame it on early exposure to Wodehouse.

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  99. This was fun, the characters wonderfully nuanced, I could see the whole thing play out in my mind - the eccentricity of it all, the worried maid and even the aunt. Good stuff.

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  100. Ha, how cute! I can totally see the uncle in my head with his old man ears.

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  101. Brilliant stuff ! A well executed piece of flash !
    My entry at no.#185

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  102. Brilliant stuff ! A well executed piece of flash !
    My entry at no.#185

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  103. Great story! I wanted to read on. :)

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  104. Reminds me a little of Dr. Jekyll, very cool way to use the words. Great entry.

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  105. It was quirky and cheerful, I loved it. :)

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  106. I'm impressed and left wanting more! Excellent job.

    Thanks, too, for stopping by and commenting on mine. I'm making the rounds today and am enjoying it.

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  107. Beautiful language. You wove those words in so naturally. Great imagery too. Nice.

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  108. Beautiful language. You wove those words in so naturally. Great imagery too. Nice.

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